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God Rolls His Own by =bewareofthesnowman:iconbewareofthesnowman:

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God rolls His own

It's not a poem
until the words are solid as soft clay
which you roll between your palms to make
a tree; or a sunset; or a man
who can stretch his kiln-fired skin into a smile -
or if he cuts his wrists
like you say he does,
it's not a poem
until real red blood escapes the cracks in the brick;

and you're not a poet,
unless after six stanzas there is nothing
for a seventh to create, and your clay creatures
potter through stop-motion lives
while you bask in the heat of your homegrown volcanoes
blowing smoke rings.
©2007-2009 =bewareofthesnowman
:iconbewareofthesnowman:

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~unattached Mar 11, 2007, 9:45:58 AM
i love this. the imagery is so vividly created. your words convey almost tactile quality. your use of alliteration and consonance is so subtle and well-placed. the whole poem made me smile. the critique on what seems to be the general writing population of deviantART is humorous, though very accurate, and well-veiled under allusions the creation-myth. it's an excellent piece of literature. i'm glad i saw you in the chat.

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~trendwhore9d my big brother
~legionofmeanies my littl brother
~NotInStock my stock account
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~unattached Mar 11, 2007, 9:46:11 AM
i love this. the imagery is so vividly created. your words convey almost tactile quality. your use of alliteration and consonance is so subtle and well-placed. the whole poem made me smile. the critique on what seems to be the general writing population of deviantART is humorous, though very accurate, and well-veiled under allusions the creation-myth. it's an excellent piece of literature. i'm glad i saw you in the chat.

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~trendwhore9d my big brother
~legionofmeanies my littl brother
~NotInStock my stock account
:iconunattached:
~unattached Mar 11, 2007, 9:46:33 AM
i love this. the imagery is so vividly created. your words convey almost tactile quality. your use of alliteration and consonance is so subtle and well-placed. the whole poem made me smile. the critique on what seems to be the general writing population of deviantART is humorous, though very accurate, and well-veiled under allusions the creation-myth. it's an excellent piece of literature. i'm glad i saw you in the chat.

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~trendwhore9d my big brother
~legionofmeanies my littl brother
~NotInStock my stock account
:iconunattached:
~unattached Mar 11, 2007, 9:46:52 AM
i love this. the imagery is so vividly created. your words convey almost tactile quality. your use of alliteration and consonance is so subtle and well-placed. the whole poem made me smile. the critique on what seems to be the general writing population of deviantART is humorous, though very accurate, and well-veiled under allusions the creation-myth. it's an excellent piece of literature. i'm glad i saw you in the chat.

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~trendwhore9d my big brother
~legionofmeanies my littl brother
~NotInStock my stock account
:iconunattached:
~unattached Mar 11, 2007, 9:48:44 AM
i wrote a really long, insightful comment about how beautiful the imagery is, and how i love your use of alliteration for its subtlety. i mentioned the brilliance of your critique on what i imagine is the quality and content of poetry on dA, and the allusion to creation myth. but then when i clicked send there was an error and it got erased and i didnt feel like typing it all out again . sorry this comment sucks. :+fav:

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~trendwhore9d my big brother
~legionofmeanies my littl brother
~NotInStock my stock account
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Mood: Lust ~DoranKhamis Mar 11, 2007, 10:26:07 AM
Someone likes it a bit too much.... I'm looking at you, unattached ;)

Although, fookin awesome mate :)

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Kikikiki

Friar's Tuck!

Music!
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Mood: Amazed ~azrael59 Mar 11, 2007, 10:49:12 AM
my snowman, it's awesome !!!!!

great work

--
°Pull up my daisy...
Let's show them...°
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!smoking-mirrors Mar 11, 2007, 11:30:11 AM
>: (

I'm not jealous at all.

--
<salshep> but then I have a thing for wood
:iconearthheavenatmospher:
~EarthHeavenAtmospher Mar 11, 2007, 12:18:18 PM
:clap: Very very good, I like the clay imagery going on :D.

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Your wild lies
Always start with wide
White lines
Summer shine
You don't like the dark
Fringed by silver sea
Always brave and pert
Sunday sun, you're up...
~Goldfrapp :sun:
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=StrayedMusician Mar 11, 2007, 12:35:18 PM
hmm hmm.

-nods-

--
there is noise in the garden
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