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Where's My Party? by =bewareofthesnowman:iconbewareofthesnowman:

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It's coming soon, right? Lord knows I've earned it,
back bent like a scythe, a labourer in my father's field.
Not one goat has bled for me, although I've fed them
pearls the swine wouldn't touch, each day of every year
that my brothers stumbled between orgies.
They wake hungover in the sty one day, and run
back to the rich daddy in the story who waits
on the road in the corner of my eye, with that coloured
coat and pimp ring and the cow I fattened myself.
And I still feed the pigs
but maybe this week is my turn. I'm in my Sunday best,
mingling with red-wine-lipped prodigals;
maybe today's embrace will be for me -
the son who never had to come home.
©2006-2009 =bewareofthesnowman
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for a prompt in #PoetRangers. for those of you who don't understand it, it's based on the parable of the prodigal son
Daily Deviation, 2007-03-04

Daily DeviationWhere's My Party? by =bewareofthesnowman is an interesting reworking of a well-known story, told from one of its character's viewpoints. (Featured by `PoeticWar)

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~l0stwhispers:iconl0stwhispers: Nov 15, 2006, 5:19:16 AM
earned*

Nice! =D I like the whole idea of it. :clap:

--
You don't know me.
So don't act like you do.
Don't ask me either,
'Cause I too don't have a clue.

... Evelyn ...
=bewareofthesnowman:iconbewareofthesnowman: Nov 15, 2006, 6:48:51 AM
glad you like it :D are you sure it's not earnt?

--
Hiss, shout, kick my teeth in, so what? I shall still tell you that you are half-wits. In three months my friends and I will be selling you our pictures for a few francs
- Manifeste cannibale dada
~l0stwhispers:iconl0stwhispers: Nov 15, 2006, 7:16:29 AM
Mhm. It's earned. xP

--
You don't know me.
So don't act like you do.
Don't ask me either,
'Cause I too don't have a clue.

... Evelyn ...
~sickofpissingabout:iconsickofpissingabout: Nov 15, 2006, 8:39:39 AM
Clever Dan I like your usual obscure slant on things that we feel we know. :highfive:

--
Do I look like a fuckin' people person?
=Synith:iconSynith: Nov 15, 2006, 9:31:17 AM
Great wording.

I'll give you more feeback later today :)

Awesome,

-S

--
Quicksand's got no sense of humor. I'm still laughing like hell.
~shawna954:iconshawna954: Nov 15, 2006, 10:22:17 AM
As a reader there are a few bumps that make this hard to understand. But, for the most part this is quite enjoyable and very well done.
~SkyLamour:iconSkyLamour: Nov 15, 2006, 10:46:45 AM
wow Danno I LOVE it!!! good job! :D

--
Razors pain you; Rivers are damp; Acids stain you; And drugs cause cramp. Guns aren't lawful; Nooses give; Gas smells awful; You might as well live."
-Dorothy Parker
`smoking-mirrors:iconsmoking-mirrors: Nov 15, 2006, 3:38:45 PM
I'm totally not jealous of your victory

...

:shakefist:

--
<salshep> but then I have a thing for wood
=StrayedMusician:iconStrayedMusician: Nov 15, 2006, 5:53:23 PM
"each day of every year
that my brothers stumbled between orgies."


Oh man, that's great.

--
"For I know why Jesus wept,
Motherfucker- "

Traduttore Traditore
=bewareofthesnowman:iconbewareofthesnowman: Nov 16, 2006, 1:43:03 AM
glad you like it :D

--
Hiss, shout, kick my teeth in, so what? I shall still tell you that you are half-wits. In three months my friends and I will be selling you our pictures for a few francs
- Manifeste cannibale dada
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